Sunday, June 10, 2012

#SixSunday from The Dark Man (Passage 2)


My goal is to share six sentences every Sunday. This one is a little late in the day, but better late than never at all.



Below is the scene where we first meet the Princess.  She’s not as treacherous as her mother, but she’s not to be underestimated either.





The Princess stuck out her lower lip and bestowed Carrig the same expression she had been giving him for 648 years, 6 months and 12 days.  It was the look she used to get him on her side, to bind him to her will; the same guise that had worked for 648 years, 6 months and 11 days. 



Her pout turned to a smile, her straight white teeth sharp and venomous.  “Do I need to want something to seek out my favorite Far Dorocha?”



“Yes.  Get to your point.”


10 comments:

  1. Nicely done! I think the way you outlined the timing, and the way you describe that the Princess's pout is no longer as effective, is a very Fae-seeming turn of phrase. I also like the pithy response.

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  2. Thanks for the comment and stopping by. The Princess doesn't have the hold of him like she used to, but it doesn't mean she won't try!

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  3. I like her change at the end. She smiled, yet revealed venomous teeth. Nice contradiction.

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    1. Thanks for the comment and stopping by. T's a piece of work.

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  4. Wow, love that she is "not to be underestimated." Now THAT's a strong heroine. Nice work! :)

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    1. Glad you approve. Thanks for stopping by and the comment!

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  5. I left a little something in my world, which is a little different to yours...

    Pop by to collect. http://troghead.blogspot.co.uk/2012/06/another-award-yay.html#axzz1xWDpPrnu

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  6. You write about faeries, therefore you are automatically cool in my book. Sounds like a great story.

    Glad I found you!

    Andrea

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